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It was an avarage school morning for Luna. All of a sudden ,  she felt something enter her body.

“What was that?” questioned Luna.

“What are you talking about Luna?” asked her best friend Lucy.

“You can’t possibly say that you didn’t feel it.” said Luna.

“I felt nothing , what happened?” asked Lucy.

“Don’t worry about it , it was probably just a cold shiver.” replied Luna.

 

No,  it was definitely  not a  cold shiver ; it was in fact powers … special powers that no one else in the world had. She was now starting to transform. What was going on?

Luna – “Ahhhhhhhh!”

 

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  1. Christina (Reply) on Saturday 25, 2017

    This is an amazing story! Try and improve by using similes, metaphors and personification to make you story seem more curious and interesting. When you use speech try and make it fascinating by stating, replied Luna with tension.

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  2. Joylin (Reply) on Saturday 25, 2017

    Jessica, that was the best post ever. I felt like I was Luna and I had this great powers. You can improve your post by typing more and continuing the story, I really want to know what happens next in the story. Also, add some tension before ending your post.

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  3. Jessica (Reply) on Saturday 25, 2017

    Thank you for your feedback. I will try to include your requests for when I write part 2 of this!

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